Since her childhood, Helen KELLER was blind and deaf.So she is different from other celebrities.In
spite of her disabilities, her achievements are very good and popular.
Firstly,she was born in June 27 1880. Helen, the blind school in Massachusetts, New York,
after reading the education of the deaf school in Massachusetts, went to the Cambridge School for Young
leades in 1896.İn 1900,she continued Harward Unıversity which it gives higher educatıon for womens.She
graduated from a bachelor's degree in 1904 won the title of one of the first blind-deaf.After she launched her
book ''Story Of My Life''.In the beginning, her book wasn't sold well,but later,ıt became a classic book ın the
world.What is more, ''the story of my life'' is the most popular book translated ınto fifty languages at these
days.In 1918, continued tourning and gained a considerable amount of money were being income American
Foundation for the Blind.She collected donations contribute greatly to improve the lifes of blind people found
their families.After World War II, Helen continued to work for not only the visually impaired Americans but
also all world.Unfortunately, she died in June 1 1968.
I think that Helen is a very patient person.Because she struggles to reach her aims.Although she comes
across many difficulties,she achieves her aims.Her achievements effected me deeply and well.In my opinion,
everybody must struggle for their aims like Helen Keller!
Dear Fatma, I'll say something about your mistakes.
YanıtlaSilPay attention to the use of capital ''I'', small ''i'' and the spelling of Harvard :]
''... which it gives higher educatıon for womens.'' If you read that sentence once again, you'll probably notice your mistake.
Be careful with the punctuation.
I didn't get what you meant in this sentence: ''continued tourning and gained a considerable amount of money were being income American
Foundation for the Blind.'' There're some grammar mistakes probably.
You said she died but you used present tense in the last paragraph. (Bengi)
hi fatma! ı couldn't understand some of your sentences in this essay.In the second paragraph,there is a sentence which starts with' Helen, the blind school in...' ı didn't understand what you wanted to mean in here. you must clarify it.
YanıtlaSil'which it gives..' you musn't use 'it' here.
'she collected donations contribute greatly to...' in this sentence you must use relative clause before 'contribute' BÜŞRA ÇALIŞKAN