Unfortunately,many traffic accidents occur in living days.These accidents cause not only death of most people but also they cause loss of material goods.The reasons of traffic accidents are carelessness,bad weather conditions,excessive use of alcohol,neglect of traffic rules etc.
Before setting out,many people drink alcohol although they know to effect badly them on road.After drinking much alcohol ,they can’t pay attention to road.They drive without obeying traffic rules.What is more,they drive fastly.As inevitable,they have an accident.They may lose their car even they lose their life.Most people drive without their driving license.Driving without driving license is very dangerous as it causes many accidents.Also,the people who haven’t a driving license can’t know exactly traffic rules.So,they drive casually and they may cause many damages.
One of the reasons of traffic accidents is weather conditions.If the weather is bad ,that is,snowy,rainy and slippery,accidents may occur in these weather conditions.For example;a person who drives on snowy or slippery road has to be so careful.If he/she is not careful ,she/he may have an accident.People can take measures to prevent traffic accidents.One of these measures is to put on chain their car ,to drive slowly and rigorously.
In order to prevent traffic accidents,the people must be so careful.They must have a driving license.If they have not a driving license,they mustn’t drive.Further,they must obey traffic rules.When they drink alcohol,they must not drive or their friend can drive their car.Also,they must be alert to weather conditions.They must carry a bag including chain,water,food,bandage,lantern in their car.
Don’t forget, traffic accidents are enemy of humanity!
Hi Fatma,
YanıtlaSilYou should have started to your second paragraph with these words ''One of the reasons'' because you started to say your reasons in second paragraph not in third one. And, you shouldn't have used ''the'' in this sentence ''the people must be so careful''.
As I understand people are not members of a specific group so there's no need for ''the''. Nice job!
(Bengi)
Cansel ISLEK
YanıtlaSilMaybe it sounds silly, but it is important to put in a space after dots and commas. It is a really important rule.
You have put two causes of accidents in one paragraph. What I mean is that you talk in your first statement about two reasons: driving with alcohol and driving without a driving license. I think you have to separate them.
"They may lose their car even they lose their life." This sentence sounds a little bit strange. You can say: They not only loose their cars, they also can loose their lives. OR They can loose their lives moreover they can loose their lives.
hi Fatma!
YanıtlaSil'neglect of traffic rules' is false. instead of it, you must use 'neglection or neglecting'
' although they know to effect badly them on road',if you used'they know being effected badly..'here,it would be better.
Except for these, there are some mistakes such as using commas, 'the' and 'a'. If you care about these, your essay will be better. BÜŞRA ÇALIŞKAN