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GLOBAL CURRICULUM WON’T KILL US, IF…
It has been issued that whether global curriculum is essential or not. I don’t have a specific idea about it because it depends on some cases, but I have some ideas. If global curriculum is wanted to be activated, it should be done in every country. For now there’re four or five countries activating it.
First of all, delegates from every country should get together to debate it. Global curriculum’s aim is to make the world a better place to live. Delegates should work together under that aim. There shouldn’t be privilege to any country, otherwise; this project can become a country’s aim. They may impose their culture so it should be avoided to make such a mistake to protect countries from lost of culture.
Curriculum should include peace, anti racism, environmental sensibility. There’s nothing bad learning other countries’ culture and past because we all are living in the same world so in the curriculum this issue should be taken into account. That doesn’t mean that we have to lose our custom. In every country’s curriculum, there must be a subject to teach other cultures in an unprejudiced way. But we have to learn our culture and past much more because it’s our own. Every country has to do it; on the other hand, they are better to learn other ones to understand each other.
Beneficial global curriculum probably won’t put into practice around the world because there are always mean people who change a project’s aim to the advantage of them. On the other hand, if all countries gather with the belief of affection, peace and benefit they may do something good for the world. If it would be put into practice, educated students under this curriculum won’t be racist, see the other countries as a threat and they will protect the world and their country.
You don't need the "that" in the first sentence.
YanıtlaSil"I don’t have a specific idea about it because it depends on some cases, but I have some ideas." This sentence is a contradiction - i have no specific idea, but i have some ideas!
In the second paragraph I would say to avoid that countries loose their culture.
Ok, one problem is you have make your audience believe that Global Curriculum is necessary, but you more how it could be made. You have to talk about the advantages with powerful examples.
Your use of language is very good no punctuation mistakes and no serious grammar mistakes.
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YanıtlaSilhi! generally good but there are some little grammatical mistakes. one of them is that sentence: ' ıf ıt would be put into practice...' we don't use modals after if. thats all.. büşra çalışkan
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