WORLD IS CHANGING
The world is developing so fast day by day. So the desires of people are changing. Needless to say that desires of people damage world.
We pollute air, water and soil. We damage nature as a result of this nature damages us.
We pollute air with gases from factories, using spray bottles, using fossil fuels, nuclear energy. These are the some of the factors that pollutes air. Air pollution can cause health problems such as asthma, some kind of cancer and infections. And also these diseases can cause one’s death.
We pollute water with toxics, dirty water which flows into the rivers, leaving sewage to sea or rivers. These things sometimes mix with water which we drink in our homes. So we can be affected and ill. For example; in some countries farmers use the rivers as source of water. Think that if a farmer uses this source, his crops are affected by it. They have a danger for people who buy these crops. Because these crops are not healthy, they can be reason of a person’s death.
We pollute soil by using fertilizer, burning crops on the fields or other things. Polluting soil is very bad thing because all of humans’ food grows on it. So damaging it means damaging us.
We have respect to the world as a result of this nature can respect us. Whatever we give to nature it gives us back double.
Nice topic.
YanıtlaSilYou don't have to use ''some of'' on third paragraph and ''releasing sewage'' would be better.
(Bengi)
Hi Okan,
YanıtlaSilYour essay resembles mine. I advise that you should use more conjuctions. Apart from that I don't see clear mistakes. Good Job ;)
(Merve ATAK)
Cansel İŞLEK
YanıtlaSilThe structure of your first sentence is not right.
In third line you need an 'and' to connect the two sentences.
gases from factories - gases of factories?
You have problems wıth the usage of 'the' and conjunctions.
Your organization is good and your paragraphs are clear.